She leans over her easel
Blush-colored shawl lying listlessly over her chair back,
Tossed off in punishment for tangling in her hands
Gazing at me – her subject
With doe-like eyes,
Selecting my beauty, flicking over flaws.
Time after time
My mind becomes lost in the folds of her gown
Angel-white, cascading in a silent rush to the floor.
But I must still my eyes
Must shush my fidgeting,
So I gaze intently at the window crack.
But the couple beyond
On the promenade are distracting,
Moving about,
Leaning towards one another to tell a comic story.
Lingering, on their way to a party no doubt
With those gloves and double-breasted jackets.
Then She clears her throat
Looks at me with those doe-eyes,
A silent reprimand,
And I know I must still myself before I too
Am tossed cross the chair back.
















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i'm glad you enjoyed it, such flattery
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i dont like "chair back", just has something i dont like lol
"Gazing at me – her subject" incorrect punctuation, colon required in the place of a period
interesting linkage from beginning to end
consistency is the key, you sometimes enjamb, but other times, you have no punctuation at the end of the line, which is not consistent with your enjambement. think on this.
thats really it heh
hope it helps
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